Contacting End-Users...

[Mike Cruz]

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[imneazmh]

pretty good format. Why don't you try call them directly? Its far better than emailing. IMO

 

[grcorp]

I would make the following changes in order of appearance:

1. Try to address the contact personally. Joe Blow should read "Dear Mr. Blow". "Who ever" puts a rather impersonal tone to your email from get get-go.

2. While I am all for stating price, saying it in the initial email is too premature, IMO. Every end user sale I have ever landed has been in cases where I did not state the price from the get-go. Over the phone is a different story, however you can expect many back and forth messages via email, so there's plenty of opportunity to mention the price to qualify them as a purchaser.

3. I'd never say that I'm offering it to other businesses. It comes across as a scare tactic to manufacture urgency.

Otherwise, you provide excellent transparency by providing your name, phone number, company name, etc., and you appear as overall straight-to-the-point by skipping the sales pitch and let the domain name do the talking.

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BTW, do note that the people who did reply to you said it wasn't in their budget. Let's say for argument's sake that you were asking $5,000. Would you have been happy with $2,000? That could very well have been in their budget.

A budget equals money. And you're after money. They showed their hand as far as I'm concerned, and that's something you should capitalize on.

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pretty good format. Why don't you try call them directly? Its far better than emailing. IMO

Much agreed, but not everybody is OK on the phone.

In fact, Zurc, your opportunity is not lost. You can call these people up at the end of the week on a "I just wanted to follow up on your email I sent you earlier..." kind of basis.

Trust me, this goes over very well. Disinterest is not necessarily the reason why they hadn't responded. Maybe they were busy and marked it unread and never got around to it.

You can't tell me that you've never told someone "Oh, I forgot to call/email you". We all have.

 

[Mike Cruz]

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[Raider]

"I am contacting you because I believe this domain would benefit your business"

No, your contacting them to benefit yourself by selling your name, I would hit the delete button for this line alone, You should always try to be openly honest and straight forward when making a sales pitch, you'll get a lot more respect.

 

[Mike Cruz]

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[Raider]

I am sure respect is something you are fluttered with on a daily basis. But can you elaborate? Do you start your emails with "I am contacting you because I am trying to stuff my pockets with your money?" C'mon now.

Several domainers use this very line in their emails as I didn't just create this email from thin air, I did a bit of research and got tid bits from a lot of respectable domainers here on DNF and NP.

You asked for opinions and I gave you mine, It's NOTHING personal, I was debating where or not I should even give you mine because of the animosity between us, but I gave it anyway in hopes you could improve your letter, I'll know better next time.

Cant you see your insulting the readers intelligence with that line? I don't care who suggested it to you or where you got, it's insulting... It's something you would hear from a salesman offering aluminum siding. Use it all you want, makes no difference to me.

 

[grcorp]

Very good point, I was un sure about this, but at the same time, I am contacting several companies and I am trying to manufacture urgency, lol. I WANT IT SOLD! But I definitely will be leaving this out of my next emails.

This reminds me of Vince Offer's line when he's pitching the shamwow; "But if you call now, 'cause you know we can't do this all day..." :lol:

It works there because he's trying to sell you a $19.99 set of towels. That amount isn't going to make him rich or the buyer poor. So they'll play along.

But remember, that ad is being seen because people are watching TV. They know that ads are going to come on trying to sell them something. You're making a cold approach, so I would consider an "act now!" tactic to be somewhat imposing.

 

[Mike Cruz]

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[Raider]

You insisted that my email was dishonest and I couldn't be respected because of it. I am some how a "dishonest" person because I am not stating in the email that I will be profiting from the sale of the domain?

Nonsense, I posted the one sentence your wrote was not entirely honest, and it's NOT... That does not insinuate that you yourself are dishonest, You really need to get over this paranoid trip your on and try to be more open minded and objective in these discussions.

And I did not suggest you notify the reader your making a profit, that's more made up nonsense. All I'm suggesting is you remove the motive for sending the email; something like this;

I am the owner of SaintCloud.net and I believe this domain would benefit your business greatly.

When you knock on my door and tell me your here to save me money on my energy bills by selling me Aluminum siding, That's dishonest, The real reason your at my door is because you want to sell me Aluminum siding that can help save me money, The benefit you talk about is secondary, it's not your primary motive for knocking on my door.. Understand?

The pitch your giving is old and it rubs a lot of people the wrong way, that's why I mentioned it.... Not that hard to understand Zurc.

 

[Mike Cruz]

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[Raider]

Trying to help you is a complete waste of time, I don't know why I even bothered.

In reference to your last line, you should seriously consider professional help for your Paranoia, it's really bad.

 

[Gerry]

What the hell happened to the thread?

Why all the deleted comments?

There was some very useful information in here.

WTF???