English help, please!

[yahoohaha]

Hi Guys,

I need the following 4 lines in the same length also means right, but my English is very poor, be appreciate your help!

Gambling online is fun but you cannot win all the time.
CasinoRefund.com is your latest very best protection.
For all of the following casinos we offer casino refund.
Refund percentage is in red next to each casino name.

Does this sounds right? Grammar problems? Improvements?

Thanks and wish you a great night!

Joe

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[yahoohaha]

lotsofissues

Thank you for your help. Those 4 lines are the main part of my site, I try to make it look even. So is the following 4 lines OK?


Gambling online is fun but you cannot win all the time.
We are your best protection against gambling losses.
For each of the following casino we offer casino refund.
Refund percentage is in red next to each casino name.

Casinos don't pay any refund, the refund is coming from my referral commission.

I know my English sucks, could you help me correct grammar for 1000 dn$? Only few pages in casinorefund.com.

Or I owe you a bud on the side?

Thanks again.

Joe

 

[yahoohaha]

NameGuy

Thanks!

I changed it, look cool. appreciate.

Joe

 

[yahoohaha]

Gambling online is fun, but you can't win all the time.
We are your best protection against gambling losses.
For each of the following casinos we offer you a refund.
Refund percentages are in red next to each casino name.

NameGuy,

Thanks again, I think your lines are unchangeable.

Joe

PS. They can even grow.

 

[DomainPairs]

You'd do better to say something like -

What's the most important rule for a professional gambler -
"Run your winnings and cut your losses"
Now for the first time, we offer a way to cut your losses -
We give you some of your money back!
Check the red percentages below to see how much.

 

[Gail]

For each of the following casinos we offer you a refund.
We give refunds for losses from the following casinos.

Changing from the passive voice to active.

 

[yahoohaha]

English is totally confusing my head, can anyone help editing the following my best writing, appreciate greatly..

Joe

Why offer casino refund?

We offer casino refund to attract more players. In the long run we make more money.

Am I qualify for apply casino refund?

If you use our referral links to visit a casino, download their games, open an account, play and lose money. You are qualify.

How much is my casino refund?

Check out refund percentage listed on our website, casino refund = net loss x refund percentage.
For example, if you play at Club Dice Casino and lose $600, your casino refund would be
$600 x 21%=$126.

How long it takes to receive my casino refund?

All casinos pay us once per month but at different date. We send out casino refund right after we get paid. You should receive casino refund within one to five weeks after your application.

I already have player account signed up through other website, can I apply casino refund?

No. In order to apply casino refund, you must sign up your player account through our referral link.

How do I apply my casino refund?

Simple. Just click Here

More questions?

Please send your questions or comments to [email protected]

 

[Anthony Ng]

This thread reminds me of the good old days when some of my teachers (I mean colleagues, I WAS a teacher myself) made ridiculous "corrections" only to make things worse.

I'd say NameGuy's touch up on the first line is by far the best or even magical with CAN'T.

Please remember that we are NOT looking for grammatically correct yet boring lines. The bottom line is: yahoohaha is SELLING, so they have to sell.

Having said all that, please excuse me for not helping. I prefer to go porn that gambling.