I think you were going good, but took a funky turn about here, where it became a "pitch", and stopped laying things out:
Now if Network Solutions and Snapnames get their way and bring out the so called Waiting List Service, then Snapnames WILL be guaranteed the right to back-order domain names - but the question is what happens to the expired domains industry ?
and who gets the right to back-order a domain ?
I feel a little funny, because I KNOW what WLS is, and the whole description starts to distort the picture to pitching why WLS is just
bad news, and not
"How top deleted domains are caught". It's like a strange "hiccup" in the process description.
Also if WLS becomes real, consumers also lose choice of a variety of methods of catching names.
This seems completely irrelevant. Customers would not CARE that they would
lose "different methods of catching names". What they DO lose is the "choice between alternate business models and pricing plans for making expired names available to the public". With WLS, everyone will have the same business model (resellers), and be subject to the same artificial base costs which are passed on to the public. The "product" will be "improved" at the cost of variety and true market competition (other than on "price".)
It all gets political the further into it you go, but at the top level I think there should not be an assumption that the majority of consumers really
care about the methodology/technology Drop Catchers use to accomplish their task, just the result.
In my opinion, you should change that WLS part and make the language match the feeling of the language that came before it.
Best,
~ Nexus